Hi Everyone
Attached is the second draft of our paper. Thanks for the comments on the blog and the new and revised bits added/moved on the Google doc. I've tried to keep everyone's comments/contributions in mind again, and what you'll notice is the following...
What's new:
1) a revised, shorter introduction based on Rachel's rewrite and bits of comments from others. It's shorter, is more food focused - e.g. some key themes are in there - plus it summarises / condenses the main contributions about blogging (now gone, but soon to surface in the 'Writing collaboration' paper) + comments on draft one that were posted on the blog.
2) a new 'endings?' section comprising fragments of people's ideas about (not) concluding, mainly from the comments on the first draft. Hope this works...
3) a shorter paper: now 7,800 words long. The long intro fragments on the blogging process have been summarised and/or edited out (to be added to the 'Writing collaboration' online-paper...) I think this is ready to submit at this length, and we'll see what Roger Lee says about this.
4) author order: previously it was alphabetical by first name, now it is in order of appearance.
Concerns?
Just one for me: two people mentioned that they thought that otherness and viscerality were a bit unbalanced. I would welcome some specific suggestions about what might be added/subtracted where. Please amend the Google doc and tell me!
[Also, there are empty spaces in the text which the copyeditor will hopefully sort out so that the columns can go over the page]
Suggestions?
Maybe we should just submit and iron out any smaller issues (that balance bit) when Roger gets back with comments. Comments and suggestions to this email list please...
Finally: thanks yet again to everyone and apologies for dragging this out so long.
Phew
Ian
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The last header before 'After' finished was posted:
Draft 1 has been sent out with an email asking for comments and ideas. There's a Google doc which we can use to work together on the text. What this blog will be useful for now - hopefully - is to air those comments and ideas, and come to a consensus on what we want to do with this paper to make it ready for submission. This is a busy time for many or all of us, and I have set a countdown on the left to the end of the month for us to try to agree on what we'll do next. So far so good... hope this continues...
Ian
4 September 2009
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